Trying to Recall


This weekend, we are revisiting a prompt we’ve done before.  We are giving you three words and asking that you add another 33 to them to make a complete 36-word response.  You may use the words in any order you choose. 

Our three words are:

remember
rain
rebellion

Now you give us yours.


Roaming around lost in thoughts
Clothes drenched from cold rain
Her rebellion against life’s rules
Seems hardly worth the pain
Picture of them in her locket
Doesn’t help her remember love
She tries.

@ donetta sifford 3-22-2013



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15 responses

  1. Thank you for your compliments. Yeah, it always seems worth it. What's the saying 'hindsight's 20/20'.

  2. This is so good I have gone back to it several times. It something I connecting to right now ..

    Picture of them in her locket
    Doesn't help her remember love
    She tries.

    It's NOT worth the rebellion but its seems like a good Idea at the time.

  3. So tragically desolate,my heart went out to her!Well written!

  4. Roaming around in the rain. Truly evocative.

  5. Rebelling against life's rules…liked that..

  6. Such a sad story, well done.

  7. There's a lot of lost hope in this piece. ),: Beautifully written!

  8. So much said in so few words. I felt this one.

  9. Thank you all very much.

  10. lancemyblogcanbeatupyourblog

    Punch in the gut content but well delivered Don. I liked that last line. good work.

  11. To yearn, unsatisfied……………..well described by you! Very good job Donetta! 🙂

  12. A complete and sad story packed in 36 words. Well written and nicely done!

  13. Very, very sad, the cold rain…this poem made me like poetry again.

  14. that is wrenching.

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