Hard Request

“You wanted brutal honesty?
Hard request.
I’ll do my best.
How do I feel about you now?
Memories of us, I cringe inside.
Imagine a dentist filling a tooth
without numbing it first.”

@ donetta sifford 8-10-2013

Written for: Trifextra Week Eighty


16 responses

  1. Excellent! That is the perfect analogy. Perfect.

  2. superb entry, I am still sore with the filling of the past 😉

  3. Wow. Ouch. Brutally honest indeed. And what a great metaphor! 🙂

  4. AH! Ouch! That's what you get when you ask for honesty! Thanks for linking up.

  5. Well, that is brutally honest! I love how you worded that.

  6. Oh, yes! This is a perfect representation of post relationship harsh feelings. I actually cringed at the end. Who hasn't been there?

    I like how the voice isn't bitter so much as bitchy–as if he didn't get the better of her, she just finally realized she deserves better than him. Buh-bye!

    Well done! 🙂

  7. Yes indeed, a relationship like that is definitely come to an end.

  8. lol Draug. Honestly it's the only thing I could think of that didn't sound cliche. The saying 'tooth and nail' popped in my head. I tried to add fingernails scratching a chalkboard but couldn't do it in 33 words. It is a horrible image. I hate hearing the drill the times I've had a filling put in, and I was very much numb. 🙂

  9. Thank you. It's the only thing I could really think of.

  10. Thank you. I was trying to think of something that wasn't heard too often. Like the saying 'tooth and nail'.

  11. Eeeww no no no why did you have to bring up such an image gah

    This is good though.

  12. Ouch! Nothing like brutal honesty.
    Great take on the prompt.

  13. Painful truth! Clever use of the prompt.

  14. This is going to hit home for many readers. Nicely done, Donetta. I really like how you've uniquely worded the last sentence. :))

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