9 thoughts on “Mountain Music

  1. I only read this after the edit. It’s lovely as it stands, but I think the original Whippoorwill as the second line might work even better.

  2. I like the way you began and ended with music. It gave such a sense of peace. Like Nate, I was a bit thrown by ‘whipper will’. Did you mean to write whippoorwill instead? That would have been such an interesting structure to have a single word as your second line.

    1. Wow… That’s embarrassing because I totally misspelled the word. Lesson learned.

      1. LOL it happens to us all!

  3. The bookends of the birdsong bring a lovely symmetry to the piece. I’m not sure why “whippoorwill” is segmented. “Whipper,” for me, brought a violence that doesn’t seem to fit with the tone.

    1. I am embarrassed to say that I misspelled the word. But thank you for your comment.

    2. Oh! I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to get super-particular. I thought it was intentional. “Whippoorwill” works really well there!

  4. Kirsten Britt Baltz

    Nice lune. You did a really good job setting the scene. My only suggestion is its “whip-poor-will”.

    1. Thank you. Embarrassingly enough, I spelled it wrong. You were kind in pointing it out and I appreciate that.

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